Writing Tips: Satire, you're Doing it Wrong

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  • Brent Campbell
    Brent Campbell Vor 21 Tag

    Watching this episode for 22 seconds before realizing this was about family guy

  • That Black Guy From The Cruise

    What about this video I would like your feedback. declips.net/video/3UsZQhBR6Sk/video.html The President's Secret Connection with Perfect Day at Coco cay

  • Paul Christoforos
    Paul Christoforos Vor 2 Monate +1

    Gee, thanks for the lecture on satire, TheMysteriousMrEnter, cause you did a great job, as always! Keep it up! From now on, I’m only appealing to those who those who agree and don’t agree with me all the time! Thank you, Polyvios Christoforos

  • T. Augustus Romer
    T. Augustus Romer Vor 3 Monate

    This is great. You're talented.

  • Pigeon Ray
    Pigeon Ray Vor 4 Monate

    First

  • Cornell Waters
    Cornell Waters Vor 4 Monate

    🎬 Thank You!

  • Jay Sea
    Jay Sea Vor 6 Monate +2

    This is the weakest satire I've ever heard.

  • SSJ4 Jason
    SSJ4 Jason Vor 7 Monate

    Take notes from this Frank Miller

  • cragwyck c
    cragwyck c Vor 7 Monate

    You can look at TheOnion and Farceynews and Babylon Bee and sometimes some good satire. You can say "Someday Cher will declare a farewell tour, and be gone from touring". That's satire. By now she's done how many farewell tours? ugh.

  • Atjn Brä
    Atjn Brä Vor 7 Monate

    Try 'Little Red Herbie'.

  • Pedro Reviews
    Pedro Reviews Vor 8 Monate +1

    This was helpful... but please don’t use Comic Sans I still hear his laugh

  • Zach Yaple
    Zach Yaple Vor 8 Monate

    Another example of satire: speed up video by 10

  • Laura Birdwell
    Laura Birdwell Vor 11 Monate +1

    Gotta agree with you on My Little Brony. I normally like CollegeHumor's content, especially Precious Plum, but in My Little Brony, it just didn't feel like their heart was in the right place.

  • Katelyn Carson
    Katelyn Carson Vor year

    take a drink

  • caslaBBalsac
    caslaBBalsac Vor 2 years

    I gotta say that the "FIRST" satire was better than the college one, even though the college one made a better point.

  • Adam Kalb
    Adam Kalb Vor 2 years +1

    9:57 Ooh, that's your next atrocity video after this Writing Tips video! Girls Gone Mild! February 13, 2018, 12:10pm

  • Adam Kalb
    Adam Kalb Vor 2 years +1

    If you want to do any more admirable animations from 2017, then the Family Guy episodes The D in Apartment 23, Petey IV and Crimes and Meg's Demeanor could be a triple admirable video like when Totally Spies's Totally Busted was a triple atrocity video. It did an excellent job of satirizing people on the internet who over react to bad jokes on the internet. Bonus points for Stewie mentioning how angry people got about DiGiornio tweeting about domestic violence on September 7, 2014.
    As another bonus to counteract other Family Guy atrocity videos,
    1) The D in Apartment 23 makes up for Life of Brian.
    2) Petey IV makes up for Brian's a Bad Father.
    3) Crimes and Meg's Demeanor makes up for Seahorse Seashell Party.
    February 13, 2018, 12:09pm

  • angelis
    angelis Vor 2 years

    one thousand, three hundred and twenty fifth!!!!1

  • Adam Kalb
    Adam Kalb Vor 2 years +1

    5:35 Replaced by robots? Wow, did you predict information you would give later in The Big Switch-A-Roo? February 2, 2018, 2:39pm

  • ram karthik
    ram karthik Vor 2 years

    You must have verified it before uploading. were you chased by a brutal bear.

  • KEJAYLENANAANA zelidinpendoasdioasdadanoobmlg

    Heh, I've apparently been making satire comments right but using them half right half wrong... I usually try to change someone's mind but I also like to deliberately piss people off :P...
    Also is using satire as a way to make someone look stupidly hypocritical or just idiotic as a way to change their mind also using it wrong? (You know some people literally need to see their own stupidity or see how wrong they're doing things to change their ways)

  • Paul
    Paul Vor 2 years

    Troll: people who make fun of different person(s)/things for da lolz usually with dark or offensive humor

  • Famine
    Famine Vor 2 years

    What is your opinion on South Park's satire...?

  • spike the god poster
    spike the god poster Vor 2 years +1

    1000th

  • mette oki
    mette oki Vor 2 years

    if its no trouble, could somebody sum this video up in a few sentences? it would be a great help :)

  • Drakensson
    Drakensson Vor 2 years

    Satire must have a point yes but it will never make the world a better place if we are being realistic. A simple book or game is not gonna change the planet. That is sugarsweet to expect.

  • SuperSwordman1
    SuperSwordman1 Vor 2 years

    Now I'm thinking some of my villain ideas for various stories or fanfictions are bad satire...

  • Roach DoggJR
    Roach DoggJR Vor 2 years

    Then satire is nearly impossible to pull off.

  • Devil's Advocate
    Devil's Advocate Vor 2 years

    Freedom toons, hunter avallone, they say satire is just making fun of stereotypes. Also, college humor just feeds on the negativity there videos create. They no they're hated, but don't care.

    • Devil's Advocate
      Devil's Advocate Vor 2 years

      I almost replied to myself. Freedom toons is more hit and miss, while hunter avallone is blatant about it. Also I misspelled know.

  • Adam Kalb
    Adam Kalb Vor 2 years +1

    It's a good thing you made this video, because if Herpe the Love Sore was meant to be a parody of satire with These 3 Guys Day celebrating the antagonists of the subplot who turned out to be soldiers when we were rooting for Peter and his friends for getting their booth back from them, and we would want These 3 Guys Day to celebrate them for not being cowards, then it failed miserably. Instead, it ended up being possibly the cruelest and most insulting moment in the entire show, episodes like 420 and Seahorse Seashell Party and Brian's a Bad Father included. That's exactly what you said about National No Spongebob Day in Gone next to Demolition Doofus and One Coarse Meal. June 8, 2017, 10:00pm

    • Adam Kalb
      Adam Kalb Vor 2 years +1

      Update: Did you see The D in Apartment 23 yet? This Family Guy episode did a much better job at satire of internet followings than Herpe the Love Sore did with bully soldiers. February 2, 2018, 2:40pm

  • Just a PLANK
    Just a PLANK Vor 3 years +1

    4:09 first

  • Paul Gola
    Paul Gola Vor 3 years

    Someone should show this video to Pwediepie.

  • Anonymous Youtuber
    Anonymous Youtuber Vor 3 years

    "Anarchism makes no sense." "B-but muh roads..."

  • Neon Skylite
    Neon Skylite Vor 3 years

    6:14 I'm going to be that one guy…
    What happens to the kids who fail?

  • RokosBasilisk
    RokosBasilisk Vor 3 years

    "A well known natural blogger in Chile died after a brutal car crash after his bike got into a head on collision with a box truck. The doctor overseeing his care was arrested and put on trial when instead of giving him a blood transfusion, he put water into his veins, allowing him to bleed out. He also never gave him any anesthetic During the trial, the doctor argued, saying that the source of the water had a drop of the blood donation in it. Seeing this as a insane excuse, the plaintiff asked him why he did it. He then responded "Well, he said he'd never take any non-homeopathic medicine, so.."
    Did I do good?

  • TankJockey38
    TankJockey38 Vor 3 years

    gonna do any more of these?

  • Digicraftmon the Crystal Gem

    perody with a point beyond being funny oh like southpark

  • שחר א.
    שחר א. Vor 3 years

    look: a troll is a high jinxed man activly trying to hurm random people as his humirous action in order to make himself laugh. For instence: notice how I activly tried to use big confusing word to tell myself the joke of how you would react to that after hearing that you want a calm, reasonable explenation. Next time therefore you wouldn't be the butt of the joke.

  • E. Gordbort
    E. Gordbort Vor 3 years +1

    +TheMysteriousMrEnter Trolling isn't intended to harm someone or make them feel bad.The point is to make people upset with you for a few minutes and then go on with your life without any lasting impact. It's basically just to get a rise out of them.
    If you bring someone to tears, break their things or generally harm them personally, it's no longer trolling. Trolling is stuff like standing in the way of your teammates in an FPS so they can't get by (annoying but ultimately harmless) or snidely replying to an extreme political comment on DEclips (you'll get them angry for a bit and receive some sharp words but unless you're insulting them personally it won't hurt most.) A bully puts people down, a troll just shakes them up for a second.
    Calling an anorexic fat or threatening someone is harassment. Being intentionally obnoxious or annoying is trolling. And if you follow someone around to continue trolling them, it becomes harassment. And it is probably a good idea to not troll children, as they will react much more extremely and feel the sting for much longer.
    The difference (at least for me) is whether your actions will have consequences reaching over 2 hours. If you are trolling, people will be upset with you for a minute but forget about you shortly. If you are bullying, they will still be feeling bad for a long time and might change their behavior negatively because of it.

  • Dr Awsome The Wizard
    Dr Awsome The Wizard Vor 3 years

    My Show Idea features the second total drama contestant voice to be on the same show as Spongebob
    Clarence was the first ( It has the voice for Izzy on the show)

  • Elliott
    Elliott Vor 3 years +11

    Somebody Please Show This Video To Leafy

    • Nocturus
      Nocturus Vor 3 years +1

      Because Leafy is gonna give a fuck about an autistic loser who bitches about children's cartoons while failing to make his own.

    • Demster Clippy
      Demster Clippy Vor 3 years +1

      The whole world actually needs to see this. Leafy is just one of the most well known people shitting on that word. He is far from the only one.

  • Riley J Fosbre
    Riley J Fosbre Vor 3 years +2

    Satire isn't an armor. If anything, it's just a bullseye.

  • Jack Perri
    Jack Perri Vor 3 years

    Your points on anarchy are completely ridiculous. There are other ways of punishment besides jail.

  • Jak3And3rson3
    Jak3And3rson3 Vor 3 years

    No, Mr. Enter, anarchy is the desire for the abolition of hierarchical systems. Not the abolition of law and order, outside of a small minority. Go look up Libertarian Socialist for more information on that subject, he tackles it quite well.

  • Zinervawyrm
    Zinervawyrm Vor 3 years

    so if I drew a comic that says Micheal Phelps is secretly a merman, and that's why he's so fast at swimming won so many Olympic gold medals…Does that count as satire?

  • marcus grenoli
    marcus grenoli Vor 3 years

    reminds me of battleblock theater

  • Madway
    Madway Vor 3 years +2

    More of these please.

  • Rex Apis
    Rex Apis Vor 3 years +1

    Just read some Mark Twain and call it a day

  • Mr Templeguy
    Mr Templeguy Vor 3 years

    6:07 OMG I READ THAT BOOK TOO!

  • seth rice
    seth rice Vor 3 years

    a rule of thumb for satire. exaggerate the flaws of an idea and follow it to its logical conclusion

  • felix schmidt
    felix schmidt Vor 3 years

    "(something he said) SH*TTING IN THEIR PANTS" XD this made me die of laughter LOL

  • Jackofhearts22
    Jackofhearts22 Vor 3 years

    10:16 sml's Jeffy

  • SuperLlama42
    SuperLlama42 Vor 3 years +1

    I've witnessed FATAL and RHW and even shit like Ethnic Cleansing, an FPS made by literal nazis where all the enemies are over-the-top racist, anti-semetic and gay stereotypes, and it just made me laugh at how games made by unabashed bigots with an overtly bigoted agenda tend to be laughably awful in ways that don't even involve the offensive content.

  • AndrewLuis CrespoDeMoura

    Btw do you want a deffinition of troll? It has no real deffinition because everyone gives a different one. I can give the deffinition that most trolls use. A troll is someone that says innapropriat or outlandish things just to see reactions. You can call the innopropriat bullying (I personnally see it as tame) but on the outlandish side you have to stretch the truth to consider it bullying. For instance, I saw a troll post on Facebook claiming that her dad was cheating on her, and she needs advice on how to win back his love. How could saying something so stupid be considered bullying unless it somehow triggers someone?

  • AndrewLuis CrespoDeMoura
    AndrewLuis CrespoDeMoura Vor 3 years +2

    As an anarchist I don't trust people not to backstab eachother. That was kind of a strawman to say we do. Rather we'd rather there be a system in place that isn't relient on having corrupt politicians in office. A better argument is that we have no agreed upon way of how rules in an anarchist society would work. We all have individual ideas about what to do, but having faith that people won't try to kill, rape, or steal isn't an idea any anarchist I know subscribes to.

    • AndrewLuis CrespoDeMoura
      AndrewLuis CrespoDeMoura Vor 3 years

      I know that point was to make fun of how people say that what you say was controversial, but I just had to clear it up.

  • Ej Lionhart
    Ej Lionhart Vor 3 years +1

    Yo real talk bruh? this taught me a lot thanks for your help and great advice.

  • Soul Brother
    Soul Brother Vor 3 years

    Your voice pissing me off already

    • Willowville
      Willowville Vor 3 years +8

      Your misfortune is truly worthy of taking up comment space.

    • rascalpod833
      rascalpod833 Vor 3 years +2

      Oh no, whatever shall you do?

  • FawksNinja
    FawksNinja Vor 3 years

    So is this satire?

    You stumble upon a crime scene. The blaring sounds of the siren echo through the air and the flashing police vehicle lights illuminate the dark alleyway. You approach one of the police and ask what happen. The policemen then responds. " Their been a murder". You then nodded to the policeman and decided to get look at the crime scene. You see the chalk drawn figure on the floor and beside a splatter of blood. You stumble backwards in disgust accidentally bumping into a police officer carrying a sealed bag. You then turn around to apologize to the police officer and you catch a glance of what appears to be an evidence bag. You slowly analyze the bag and begin describing the contents to yourself. The bag contains a small cardboard orange juice carton and the cover of the carton is featuring Simpson characters as a promotional ad for the Simpsons final season. The policemen then ushers you out of the crime scene. End scene.

  • Jamie van Brewen
    Jamie van Brewen Vor 3 years +1

    Great video and I agree completely. My only recommendation is that you either speak more slowly or take the marbles out of your mouth. I had to back up and repeat so much that I probably saw half of the video three or four times before I'd seen all of it once.
    Otherwise, it's brilliant. I was also delighted to learn about the girl who wrote the satirical standardized test.

  • Rex Hernández
    Rex Hernández Vor 3 years +3

    A troll jokes for fun, and is generally meant to be harmless. A bully jokes with the explicit intention to cause any sort of harm.

    • Clown Fiesta
      Clown Fiesta Vor 3 years +1

      Trolls are usually intentionally malicious but use the "oh, i'm a troll-- i don't mean it" card as a shield. They might intend to be harmless, but they sure have a funny way of showing it.
      Edit: They intentionally hurt people at an attempt of "Irony" or "Satire" but in most cases it seems they never bother to look up the definition of either of these

    • Brian Molinet
      Brian Molinet Vor 3 years

      Well, it kinda isn´t

    • nack287
      nack287 Vor 3 years +2

      +Rex Hernández Unfortunately, it's extremely hard to tell the difference online.

  • Mountain Chicken
    Mountain Chicken Vor 3 years

    First!

    " pay attention to my pathetic soul, I'm on the brink of sucide because nobody cares about me cause I'm an annoying, stupid, and evil human being."

  • Eldergeek
    Eldergeek Vor 4 years

    Jonathan Swift's "A Modest Proposal" has been used as example of well written satire. Do you agree or disagree and why? I understand you would be shocked on how academic this sounds but I'm curious.

  • Allan Starr
    Allan Starr Vor 4 years

    One can repeatedly say that another is a mororn, as long as they give an example of why each time, right?

    • Allan Starr
      Allan Starr Vor 4 years

      Ah, alright then.

    • TheWallachianBard
      TheWallachianBard Vor 4 years

      +Robin Starr No..that would be an Ad hominem. Which means attacking the person.

  • A Mother Fluffing Dragonite

    Wait that Zelda Williams thing happened?

  • LoboGuara5bruxaria
    LoboGuara5bruxaria Vor 4 years

    Yeah, I guess Cracked website would benefit of this video.

    • LoboGuara5bruxaria
      LoboGuara5bruxaria Vor 3 years +1

      @rascalpod833 Again, Cracked editorial REALLY needs to watch this video.

    • rascalpod833
      rascalpod833 Vor 3 years

      Basically any list that doesn't involve creepy shit or weird animals, is just bad.

    • LoboGuara5bruxaria
      LoboGuara5bruxaria Vor 3 years

      Dont you belive me? Just read this:
      www.cracked.com/blog/4-ways-you-are-being-aged-out-by-gaming-industry/

  • Thoranzalar Vhazen
    Thoranzalar Vhazen Vor 4 years

    Cntrl+Alt+Delete the web series should watch this video.

  • kats
    kats Vor 4 years +1

    Someone actually sent a picture of a dead Robin Williams to his daughter? Ignorant pigs! What the fuck's wrong with these people?

  • king_ Tesseract
    king_ Tesseract Vor 4 years

    Wait wait this whole video is while factual essentially a joke about about family guy defenders not understanding satire. damn that's funny

  • M2B
    M2B Vor 4 years

    I'm curious. Would you say Good Satire and Hyperbole work hand in hand soemtimes?

  • purpleguy319
    purpleguy319 Vor 4 years

    Just to be clear, in FATAL, bugbears eat child but rape mothers, and ogres swallow children whole, no rape required. FATAL is garbage but there is no need for slander my good sir.

  • Elfos64
    Elfos64 Vor 4 years

    I don't think people are playing the satire card to say "that excuses it from being bad", I think they mean "you misunderstood what it was trying to do". I can't speak for every negative review you've done where people use that excuse, but it does seem kind of like you miss the point sometimes. You'll think that the story was about party B when it was actually about party A, or you just kind of neglect the message it was trying (and admittedly failed) to convey and only focus on the negative way you interpreted it. For example, that review you did of that Recess episode where that kid doesn't like TJ. You thought the video was about the kid who didn't like him, conveying the message that it's okay to dislike people for no reason, a terrible message. In reality, I'm pretty sure the episode was about TJ, conveying that sometimes people will dislike you for no apparent reason- but that's okay because you can't expect everyone to like you. Maybe that kid did have a subconscious reason he disliked TJ, he just couldn't articulate it well, and as such "I don't know, I just don't" is the only reason he could come up with even if there was a real reason.

    • Elfos64
      Elfos64 Vor 4 years

      @night mare I try to make a point out of that. Glad it doesn't go unnoticed.

  • Jay Buzzton
    Jay Buzzton Vor 4 years

    What happens to the kids who fail the test in the goosebumps book?

  • TheZeldawisdom
    TheZeldawisdom Vor 4 years

    This helped me a lot. Thank you for this information. I've always been curious on the subject. And one of my favorite people do a video on it.

  • AttackCasserole
    AttackCasserole Vor 4 years

    'Satire' count; 54.

  • Inspector Javert
    Inspector Javert Vor 4 years +1

    Maybe you address this later but in the US the rules are different for people in the public eye. Larry Flynt got away with claiming that Jerry Falwell boinked his mother by calling it satire.

  • Giffy Guy
    Giffy Guy Vor 4 years +5

    A troll is egotistical, content, smug, and lacks empathy. Trolls entertain themselves by inciting anger in other people.
    A bully is insecure, self-conscious, and sensitive. Bullies seek comfort by asserting dominance over other people.
    They're two completely different psychological profiles.

    • Giffy Guy
      Giffy Guy Vor 4 years +3

      @That one Weavile
      That's effectively what I said in my original post, but oversimplified IMO.
      Try replacing
      "because they hate the person"
      with
      "because they hate the person out of jealousy, envy, insecurity, low self-esteem, guilt, etc."
      A person who is emotionally stable, doesn't get comfort out of harassing others, which is why they don't do it.
      In order to get comfort from harassing people, you need to have underlying emotional problems to begin with.
      Most bullies are in denial of this, which is perfectly understandable and expected.
      Likewise, trolling requires a certain lack of empathy, also known as sociopathy.
      This also means trolls, generally, aren't totally emotionally stable - but in a different way than bullies.
      In fact, these two types of emotional instability (low self-esteem vs sociopathy) are rarely seen combined in a single person - but if they are, it's usually a full-blown serial killer.

    • Oldschoolgamer1
      Oldschoolgamer1 Vor 4 years +4

      +Giffy Guy Cyber bully: Will harass someone because they hate the person.
      Troll: Baits someone to get them mad.
      there is the difference.

    • Giffy Guy
      Giffy Guy Vor 4 years +1

      @ElectricMayhem87 (Ashleigh) Are you certain they thought highly of themselves?
      Because that's usually just an act.
      (I grew up in similar circumstances)
      Then again, maybe they were just unsympathetic trolls, trolling people in real life.

    • PhoenixRising87
      PhoenixRising87 Vor 4 years +3

      There are certain bullies who fit the description you just gave of a troll (trust me; I grew up in the suburbs among kids who enjoyed picking at other kids for kicks, and who actually thought very highly of themselves).

  • dude dude
    dude dude Vor 4 years

    having the most obscure humor ever, i can say keep it subtle guys

  • Gadge Schwahl
    Gadge Schwahl Vor 4 years

    i was obviously offended by that family guy episode

  • PhoenixRising87
    PhoenixRising87 Vor 4 years +44

    Another important point is that satire doesn't have to be comedic. Animal Farm, Fight Club and Spike Lee's Bamboozled are all examples of non-comedic satire; they are all exaggerated stories meant to make a point.

    • Mr. Friendship
      Mr. Friendship Vor 29 Tage +2

      @Crick1952 Well, satire is a form of genre that makes fun of the flaws of society in order to prove what is right and wrong.

    • Crick1952
      Crick1952 Vor 4 years +14

      Exactly, there are so many people here that think satire = joke

  • Henry Buehler
    Henry Buehler Vor 4 years +1

    I'd really love more of these or for this to be a series.